英訳に間違いが有れば正してください。
私が初めて彼を私の子供に紹介したとき、私の娘は彼の考えと思考過程に魅了されました。
The first time I introduced him my children, my daughter was fascinated with his thinking and thought process.
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答え to my childrenにする
The first time I introduced him to my children, my daughter was fascinated with his thinking and thought process.
introduceは目的語を二つ取らない
introduce＋目的語＋to～
目的語を～に紹介する
